"Why People Don't Help in a
Crisis"
According to Darley and Lazane people do not help in a crisis situation each other
because of many reasons. In some cases people ignore to help. They just do not pay
attention. The others continued to stare and unable to turn away do not do anything. I
some cases bystander has to understand and notice that something is happening but
considering a bad manner to look closely and to stare, thinking about respect the privacy
of others, people just close their eyes and ears to avoid staring and pass around. Very
often peoples’ behavior shaped by action of crowd.
People do not care, It is not their own problem it someone in distress. They forgot
that each of them could be in that situation. And what they would think then "I need
help, I distressed, why no one is going to help me? Why people do not pay attention and
just pass around?" Thinking of that we have the other side of view. |
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This essay is seriously inadequate as a response to
the passage and the essay topic. Paragraph one presents Darley and Latané’s ideas as
if they were primarily concerned with explaining why different groups of bystanders remain
aloof rather than with explaining the process of deciding to help that each bystander must
go through. (This presentation gains much of the minimal coherence it has through its
borrowing of phrases from the passage, phrases like "notice that something is
happening" and "respect the privacy of others.") The second paragraph
presents what the writer calls "the other side of view," asking whether people
wouldn’t want to be helped if they were in distress. It does not discuss examples to
help us see whether Darley and Latané’s ideas "explain--or justify" the
actions of specific bystanders. The language of this response is very
limited. Besides being very brief and including significant copying from the passage, the
essay includes a pervasive pattern of errors: omitted "to be" verbs ("if
someone [is] in distress"), much ungrammatical word order ("Why no one is going
to help me?"), non-idiomatic phrasing ("help in a crisis situation each
other"), omitted articles ("[a/the] bystander has to understand"). It
suggests that its writer would profit from extensive practice reading and writing in
English.
Overall Evaluation: INADEQUATE WRITING |
