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For the past two decades women have come a long way. Traditionally, women have generally been homemakers and men have always been the bread winners. If women worked, they were likely to be nurses or secretaries who would earn far less money, and the men were always the bosses. Today's society is very different from the old stereotypes of the past.

Along time ago the traditional family was made up of a husband, wife, kids and a station wagon. Today, the gay community have come out of the closet and men and men are living together and women and women are lovers, too. There is a lot of homophobia but the society is stuck with this and the "traditional family' maybe needs to be redefined.

Though women still do not earn as much as men do today, they have gained a lot of status in society, thanks in part to the women's movement (N.O.W). Women are C.E.O.'s of companies, some own their own businesses, some are lawyers and doctors, roles assumed only by men for over the centuries. Women are very aggressive, too, today and they do really fight for their rights and recognition. Men really feel intimidated, but times have changed.

Several decades ago, it was unheard of to have a female minister. Today, many denominations ordain female ministers. Some conservative religious groups like the Southern Baptists are very opposed to this, including the likes of Jerry Farwell's fundamentalist groups. As the impossible comes to reality, the catholic church will one day follow this trend.

Terminology has changed a lot when today you hear of "chairperson, boss person, shero and so many people are going overboard. Traditionally, clubs that were specifically just for men, have to make room for women before they are slapped with a discrimination suit. When it comes to sports, only men play certain games like baseball but women are trying hard to get there.

Despite many changes, it is still a male dominated society and it may take forever to change attitudes on what roles men or women should play. Nonetheless, some men are staying home today while their wives are working-unheard of years ago. It takes two paychecks today for an average family to survive. Most kids grow up wi ' the the baby-sitter while mom is juggling work and raising a family at the same time.

A woman can walk up to man today and ask him to marry her, that was unheard of a while ago. The traditional family is no longer the norm. There are single parent families and it is just a reality. Children are conceived in test tubes today, and who knows what will happen next.

Women have come a long way in the last two decades, but they still have a long way to go. So much has changed, but things will keep on changing.

The writer of this essay provides a range of appropriate examples to support his position, although these examples are not asJully developed as they would be in a -6" essay. The essay shows some depth and complexity of thought, and the few errors in grammar, mechanics, and usage Cearned"for "earn, " havefor has, several misspellings and missing commas) are not serious enough to confuse the reader or to distort the meaning. Obviously, this could be a much more polished essay if the writer had had timefor revision, but, as afirst draft, it indicates that this student is well-prepared to handle the work of a freshman English course.

 

 


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