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Major changes have occurred over the past few decades in attitudes toward what the role of men and women should be in society. Personally, I come from an hispanic family where my grandparents believed that raising a family was the most important thing in life. And that the woman served her husband and children, and the man worked to support his family.

Education wasn't really stressed or encouraged. In matter of fact, my generation is the first generation of the female gender that happens to graduate from high school and attend the University. Now my parents expect the same out of their daughters as their sons. They've realize that we could obtain any occupation we desire. But the most important factor is that we also comprehend the fact that things aren't so easy. Women need to try slightly harder to achieve their goals. It seems that society has something against breaking bious traditions. Though things have changed a bit, I'm still expecting for it to progress a little more. When women and men are able to be anything they yearn for in fife!

Another factor that contributes to the idea of the extent of attitudes toward the role of men and women changes is that now a days its alright for men to stay home and take care of the children and do the house chores. And for women to work outside the home. My mother has never worked outside the house before. She has dedicated all of her hard working life to her family. My father in the other hand need to find at least two jobs to support the family. Now, my sisters and brothers work, but if either one is lay off they participate in the house chores; looldng for the others, cleaning the house, mowing the lawn...

This is something I thank my parents for. They have taught us that we are all equal. in my home, boys or girls, doesn't make a difference to the same things. We don't have specific jobs. Who ever happens to have free time is given a duty to work on.

Though some major changes have occurred over the past few decades in attitudes toward what the role of men and women should be in society some traditions have remained. For example a woman is not eligible to become pope or alter girls. This makes it extremely difficult for me to believe because I was brought up with the idea that God created us equal and that we are all his children. Then how or why aren't women given the same opportunities as men. In respect, I consider women to take over such a position.

This essay demonstrates thefact that many students who have English as their second language have developed their writing skills sufficiently to succeed in university-level classes without first taking remedial classes. The essay does rejlect some problems in usage, grammar, and mechanics (realize for realized, bious for biased, in the other handfor on the other hand, doesn't for don't and some sentence fragments), but, on the whole, it addresses the question, reveals some organization

and development, supports most points adequately, and demonstrates some facility with language. The errors that it does have do not severely obscure meaning. This student should be able to handle the work ofa freshman English course.

 

 


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