In the past few decades,
the attitudes toward what the roles of men and women should be in the family, in the
workplace, and in personal relationship have had some changes. But in my view, the
traditional attitudes toward female and male roles continue in our society.
First of all let's talk about both men and women's roles in the family.
in the good old days, Women were housekeepers and babysitters. And men were the money
makers. However, as the years past away, more and more women have gone of home to work.
The roles of men and women in the family have had some changes since. Men would share the
houseworks with women. But there are still more than half of the houseworks would fall
into the women's shouder. For example, my uncle and his wife they both have a job.
Everyday his wife has to cook the dinner, wash the dish and take care of the baby after
work. And my uncle isn't away help her. He away says: "that is what a good wife
should be doing."
The second thing is men and women's role in the workplace. In the past
couple decades, more women have taken a job outside of home. As the result men have to
share the job with women. However, women sometimes would get low pay than men as they have
the same job tide. For example, a man and a woman both are clerk of a bank. They have the
same job. However sometimes the man would get $2,000 a month and the woman would get only
$1,800 a month. This thing happened because most people thing that men are more smarter
than women. And men can handle their job better then women. in addition, some people thing
that women are only helpers and men are the boss in the workplace.
At the end. In my view |
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This essay received
a score of 3 because it is flawed in several
significant ways. While the essay begins well in the first paragraph, the writer's control
quickly begins to break down in paragraph two. Sentences tend to be choppy, with important
syntactic structures often missing Besides avoiding more complex sentence construction,
the writer does not have a firm grasp of inflectional endings and idiomatic usage (dish
for dishes, houseworks for housework, into for onto, "isn't away help "for
"doesn't always he6D, " clerk for clerks, thing for think). The essay, as a
whole, has an accumulation of errors in word choice, mechanics, usage, and syntax. Many of
these errors suggest that the student is still struggling with the problems of learning to
use English as a second language. The essay ends in mid-sentence, indicating that the
student had not allowed sufficient time to develop her own views.
In short, the essay demonstrates that the student is not a
sufficiently experienced writer to be able to do the work of a university-level freshman
composition class. She will need serious and sustained work on written syntax and usage,
on planning and organization, and on proofreading before she will be able to succeed at
college level work in English. |
