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Many people has different personal relationships. because most thing is different about fife. Some people rich or not.

So I thing parent make personal relationship.

because children see the what they do and children see the life so children see that end run same thing just I thing

sa I went to talk about major change most people change the major because Then don't like they major or just go with friend, or to church.

About me. I came it country and I go to high school about four years ago I

don't know how speak English. about month later I undertens and speak little.

And go out with friend have fun. meet the girl. it so fun.

I like it country about my country. high school can't diuer and They can't go out at night. Some people can go out not many. because parent say na so. They personal realtionship is same just I thing many parents say you can't do it do that.

by if country rue can do anything because freecountry, so it country people has different realtionship.

about woman I don't know about woman. by I think many woman don't want go school because They want money or car. hous, and rich husband. by some woman go to college and stay hard and get the pat time job I think it better because They have same. and it easy to work and most people bring job to college women. most women. has different personal realtionship.

and life is go around. because parent make realtionship or change life because may be parent rich. just like millianaire. They give many to they run or dough. Most people do that so they can change the you life and realtionship.

This essay illustrates the scoring guide's criteria for a score of 1: it is unfocused, illogical, and incoherent. Nearly every line demonstrates the writer's great difficulties with English; he has not yet developed a sense of sentence boundaries, and he seems ignorant of even the most basic rules of written usage. On the rhetorical level, the writer demonstrates little understanding of how to respond to the question or how to construct an essay. Consequently, he fills the page with random thoughts, only occasionally coming near the topic. The student's knowledge of the conventions of written English is so seriously deficient in so many ways that college-level work would seem, at the moment, to be beyond his capacity.